New technologies have change the way children spend their time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Over the past decade, using new technologies is becoming prevalent recognized phenomenon to children. Although this may bring several downsides for children, the returns are highly justifible.
On the one hand, there are two drawbacks when children devote much their time to playing games and surfing the Internet. Firstly, over-using these technologies is waste of time by spending their priceless time to playing useless apps, instead of visiting their counsins or doing excercise. Secondly, they keep their eyes glued to computer and mobile screens many hours, they may suffer from eye-strain and health problems. My friend, for example, usually has a headache when he use hi-fi devices too long.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such disvantages. Since knowledge source in the Internet is enormous, so children could spend time to broaden their horizons. For instance, my young daughter, often spend hours on the Internet learning English and new skills such as cooking and flower arrangement. In addition, youngsters have countless opportunities to meet friends from over the world with the same interests through using chat rooms and social network such as Facebook and Skype. As a result, new technologies both promote children’s self-study and assist them to connect with friends more.
In conclusion, I would argue that the advantages of these modern equipments are more significant than the disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 162, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...irstly, over-using these technologies is waste of time by spending their priceles...
^^
Line 2, column 479, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...example, usually has a headache when he use hi-fi devices too long. On the other h...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1240.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46255506608 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8451602471 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.678414096916 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9425375604 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.333333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.75 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273545405203 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877232667702 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075579481543 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136129730529 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581374871626 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.