New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
From the past generation until this modern era, thanks to the advancement of technology, way of life style has huge change in this period in many different age groups. Particularly, children’s leisure activities have significant been changed a lot. It is true there are several merits, however, I believe the drawbacks are more significant than advantages. This essay will discuss both side of the matter and show the reason why disadvantages outweigh benefits.
To start with, it is not deniable, there are few advantages. In the first place, children in the past could only read a books or play with their peer groups outside. On the contrary, children in this period could relieve stress and entertain themselves by developed devices such as smart phone, computer and video games. What is more, these kind of tools are usually eye-catching, appealing and exciting. Thereby, children could learn various skills word usage, proper pronunciation and sense of imagination. At the same time, the obvious advantage to consider that they can develop their way of thinking and ability of using technological gadgets. Finally, it would broaden their horizons. As described above, children could be more familiarized and proficient about technology.
On the other side of the coin, several severe disadvantages are shown in this phenomenon. First and foremost, children have lack of self-control, it means they are easily exposed by games and TV programs. Because of this, they could have sedentary life style. For example, they tend not to do outdoor activities compared to the past. At the end, this habit consequently increase the risk of health problem like obesity and diabetes. Moreover, they would be addicted with the technological gadgets. This could possibly disrupt children’s study or responsibility. As a result, they would be faced with lower quality of life and worse academic performance.
Taking everything into account, I am convinced that although new technologies might have a positive impact on children to some extent, the drawbacks far overshadow the benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, kind of, such as, as a result, it is true, on the contrary, to start with, what is more, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39024390244 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98827771271 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628048780488 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3120844847 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1904761905 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.619047619 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307422865577 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713478358051 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514527625641 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163271578654 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254877361489 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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