Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that government should invest money to prevent illness through expending of promoting of healthy life style. While others believe the money should be used for actual patients. I partially agree with given topic due to several reasons and examples which would be explored in following paragraphs.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that advertise healthy life style would effective solution to prevent sedentary life style which is main factor of diabetes and obesity. This solution will lead the potential patients would not have serious illness unlike past few decades. For example, the public advertisement of smoking in Korea have reduced the amount of sales of cigarettes significantly. At the same time, the number of patients who are suffered lung cancer also decreased. This could be one of affirmative results of promoting healthy lifestyle by government.
On the other hand, the first priority of spending government fund of ministry of health should be spent for patients. Some patients should spend enormous money to cure or slower their disease. Taking American patients as a good example, Americans health care system is considerably poor, the citizen could not rely on national health care. Therefore, they apply private insurances which are expensive and complex. As a results, some patients abandon their life by themselves as they could not expect any financial aid from government. This is still tragic issue and example.
Taking everything into account, promoting healthy living is important and good solution for long sighted view. However, treatment should be first prior in health service spending.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41245136187 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61811905411 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618677042802 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6132042852 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9375 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0625 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206970122098 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624386938904 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690118805776 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121783874846 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462302770042 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.