Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The healthy life is a paramount todays, as we can see the number of people who is becoming a sacrifice of disease. Meanwhile, several people say that it is significant for government to spend much money or advertise of the healthy lifestyle to avoid an illness than use it to medicate who are suffering cause of it.
On the one side, as matter of fact nowadays, the account of people who already ill is growing dramatically, It is due to of several causes. The first, the way life of society about eating is unsuitable with the standard of healthy life, where diet which is irregularly, less of nutrition, the schedule of eat is broken. Secondly, figure of kinds of fast food encourage the communities to consume it more often even the people feel comfortable of it because they thing that this is simple. In addition, the people should be attention of the life work balance. In conclusion, the society need warming alarm from the special side, about this point is government.
On the other side, there are several issues that is controversial now is increasingly of the sufferer diseases types. This happen should be prevented because will gives an effect in the community environment as well as will make a rise the number of dyed people. For example, Indonesia is one of country which is the large value of population but in 2004 was happening reduced where the biggest caused of it was healthy, moreover the people who suffered serious ill was largest. As result, to avoid this case the government should be subsidizing however they are becoming volunteer supplier as communities who necessary of it. while that it is better if the government provides some facilities such as hospital and others then share a notification or promotion about the important of healthy lifestyle, because the restrain is better than a medicate.
To sum up, in my point of view, I agree with the statement that the government has a large role of it therefore they need to spending much money to protect the society leastwise giving information about this matter.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86324786325 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74650376441 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532763532764 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.8743757355 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.307692308 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1538461538 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263203362238 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083393564895 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790469993611 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161980356705 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798424077651 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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