Nowadays celebraties are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this has bad example for young people To what extend do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Nowadays celebraties are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this has bad example for young people. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays, celebraties are become more famous for their luxury lifestyle and some are famous for their hard working. Some individuals believe this has bad impact on youngsters. This notion have both pros and cons. I shed some light on both views in forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, there are plethora of side effects on youngsters. Some masses follow their favourite celebrity and they also want to make life like this. Some celebrities are living luxury lifestyle and do show off and post pictures of some luxury things on social media. Therefore followers see these posts and they also force their parents to buy the same thing, owing to this some parents become under stress. For instance, the Indian cricket team player named Virat Kohli, he lives luxury life as well as he also showoff some luxury cars and bunglow, due to which, youngsters want to live that type of life too, without any struggle and it shows bad effect on youngsters.
On the flip side, there are some advantages of this notion. Some celebrities live simple life without showoff and teenagers become encourage to live their life like them. For example, the football player, Cristian Ronaldo is the famous celebrity in the world and he is down to earth and have some patience too. He is health conscious and his followers also join gym to become like him.
To conclude, although there are some celebrities who showoff their luxurious lifestyle which shows bad effect on individuals, yet, most of celebrities are health conscious, it is a good impression on their followers. Moreover, I personally believe that, it is depend on the youngsters, who are the celebraties which they follow them.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...s bad impact on youngsters. This notion have both pros and cons. I shed some light o...
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Line 2, column 272, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... of some luxury things on social media. Therefore followers see these posts and they also...
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Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...ootball player, Cristian Ronaldo is the famous celebrity in the world and he is down to earth an...
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Line 4, column 50, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a showoff'.
Suggestion: who is a showoff
...de, although there are some celebrities who showoff their luxurious lifestyle which shows b...
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Line 4, column 132, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the celebrities') or simply say ''most celebrities''.
Suggestion: most of the celebrities; most celebrities
...h shows bad effect on individuals, yet, most of celebrities are health conscious, it is a good impr...
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Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...eover, I personally believe that, it is depend on the youngsters, who are the celebrat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.975 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52161826482 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528571428571 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7292409312 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8666666667 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177328074372 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068109132443 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903677225656 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13634840033 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814864734333 0.056905535591 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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