Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this set a bad example for young people
To what extent do you agree or disagree to this?
Nowadays, It is true that besides personal achievements, celebrities can attain a certain level of fame with their allure and affluence. Although there are concerns about the detrimental impressions on young generation from this way of gaining attention, I believe the opposite opinion for the following reasons.
To begin with, the popularity based on trivial matters only tends to be short-lived. Admittedly, with the prevalence of social media an individual can quickly gain huge attention with little effort. A good example would be Paris Hilton, who was notorious for her extravagant lifestyle in the early 2000s. Images of her participation in parties and scandals promoted the message that appearance and glamour are more important than achievements and contributions to society. As a result, viewers boycotted her way of life and magazines abandoned her after a few months. This example, hence, prove that the general public are equipped with enough knowledge to recognize and prevent potential sources of toxic influences
However, the fortunes and accomplishments of many celebrities can motivate young people in pursuit of their passion. Countless actors, musicians, business people have made millions of dollars and achieve worldwide admiration because of their strenuous efforts to realize their dreams. The current status quo of figures like Messi, Bill Gates, or Taylor Swift is the fruition of their perseverance and years of practice to develop their skills. Therefore, such famous people and their assets can inspire children and adults alike who desire to become successful in their chosen field.
In conclusion, glamour and wealth can temporarily put people in the limelight but the inspirational attainments behind those are what make others hold some people in high prestige in the long term. I believe this lesson is thoroughly absorbed by the present generation when looking upon famous individuals
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53378378378 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88281601837 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.679054054054 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.381496781 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287885849608 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798255920265 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480457582229 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146492754364 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403288573082 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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