In today's competitive world, families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say that the children in these families benefit from additional incomes, others feel that they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?
It is common for modern-day families to have dual sources of income. While some people raise doubts about the detrimental impacts on occupied couples’ offsprings, I take sides with the view that children benefit from this background.
To begin with, stable financial support can also make a contribution to a child’s success. The primary reason for both parents joining the job market is to cover the basic needs of the family. The living expenses, notably in urban areas, are on a consistent rise which, therefore, prompt parents to become breadwinners, relieving the pressure on one partner as well as securing the family access to healthcare, education and other services. In addition, having an extra source of income allows parents to invest in materials that facilitate their offspring’s development, such as extra tutoring for better academic performances or recreational activities like sports for the best physical condition. In other words, children with working parents are worry-free/ of little worry about money when pursuing their interests that may benefit them in the long run.
However, parental failure to strike a balance between work and life can take a toll on the child's well-being. First, as assignments are prioritized over quality family gatherings and talks, occupied couples may possibly overlook issues that distress their child's mental health like peer pressure, bullying or simply emotional changes during puberty. Furthermore, the chance of kids exposing to toxic content like violent games, smoking advertisements is also higher because the busy and tight work schedule distracts parents from keeping the flow of information in check. This problem, if continuing for a long time, can result in a deformed set of behavior and moral values, which is partly responsible for juvenile delinquencies.
In conclusion, for the aforementioned reasons, I believe that a dual-income family is beneficial for a child in the long run. Nevertheless, It is advisable for parents to make a balance between work and family affairs, thus ensuring their offspring's healthy development and the minimum level of risks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46686746988 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92842193506 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638554216867 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.9146264536 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.615384615 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9230769231 7.06120827912 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283227446542 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907518820751 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036899619891 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166267224632 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388354642541 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.