Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example to adolescents.
Do you agree with this? What does this trend cause?
It is undisputed that people hardly can resist the attraction of those with fascinating and luxurious appearances, especially the youth. However, there are some actual artists who passionately devote themselves to this industry. Therefore, I do not fully agree with the statement and the consequences of the mentioned phenomenon will be discussed in this essay.
There is no doubt that nascent celebrities can gain a great amount of public recognition by showing off their appealing and dazzling images. This is not a new occurrence in ‘showbiz’ due to the fame and commercial benefits one can achieve depending on their popularity level. For instance, once people have a certain influence, they can achieve a lot of benefits. As a result, without any impressive accomplishment but money, everyone can become famous. On the other hand, in this entertaining environment, trends change and pass by every second so the non-talents ones will be directly eliminated and be replaced by several other worthy ones. By this, the more famous people are, the more attainment they have achieved.
Consequently, people who are burgeoning successfully without any impressive skills can badly exemplify the neophytes in this industry. They can intentionally assume that to climb up to the top of their career, achievements and actual talents are not necessary but wealth and luxurious images towards the public can help them remain for a long period. Besides, this trend indirectly lowers the true value of the appellation ‘celebrity’. Famous people used to be known for their flairs in singing, acting, hosting and other relevant skills but nowadays only being prosperous and having an attractive appearance can help people acquire lots of admiration. Therefore, this undoubtedly has a negative impact on the quality of being famous.
To conclude, the aforementioned is a controversial opinion which is still being argued currently and it does detrimentally affect the value of being acknowledged by the public. In my opinion, the public should be more selective in supporting or choosing their role models.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he more attainment they have achieved. Consequently, people who are burgeoning ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, for instance, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40303030303 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09157598272 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9581586201 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4375 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297631781 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975321976427 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496570705779 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168996257835 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719325664722 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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