Nowadays, celebrities increasingly have the status of role models, in particular for younger people. Do you see this as a positive or negative development?
Today, there is a burgeoning rate of people, particularly youngsters adoring to the extent that considering celebrities as models and souls of their life. This creates both advantageous and disadvantageous aspects for the development of young generations. In my views, the negativity of this development may overweight its positivity.
It cannot be deniable that admiring and imitating celebrities have a benefit to youngsters to some degree. Firstly, notable stars must be exceptionally talented, which outstanding in not only a main major such as singing, acting, dancing, but also in various related and unrelated subjects like playing piano, composing or having a great eye on fashion. In a deeper statistics, most big names are multi-talented, which can compose, dance and sing or play piano and sing at the same time, so they are admirable and worth to be imitated. Secondly, learning from celebrities creates a high motivation for youngsters to promote their life in their idol’s field. For example, they may desire to be a singer or an actor, or basically a well-known person like their model, whereby working harder to attain their goals.
However, exceed adoring someone is extremely negative, especially if their idols are bad in a real life or famous for only scandals, which is popular in a celebrity’s life. This leads to an unfavorable and adverse trend that people makes money by scandals but not spend time studying and improving their capabilities. Furthermore, the redundant adoration also leads to psychological problems that youngsters throw out their careers, responsibilities and works to follow and imitate deeply their idols day-to-day. There are many examples of “patients” of exceed admiration who lick a celebrity’s chair or kill themselves due to a scandal of idols.
In conclusion, I agree that admiring celebrities creates both beneficial and adverse impacts, but I incline towards its negativity. In my point of view, people should adore businessmen or experts instead.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45079365079 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31279234129 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622222222222 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4889535817 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.642857143 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125338115831 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049813586247 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443813973187 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878664001464 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751083220842 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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