Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures.
Do you agree or disagree?
In the contemporary world, tourism- a worldwide profit-making industry has arouse controversy among people over its advantages and disadvantages. Although some assert that the development of international tourism might pose a threat to the connection between people, I hold a belief that it bridges the gap between different nations.
On the one hand, unprecedented growth and unsuitable codes of conduct are two justifications why this phenomenon is perceived to provoke the hostility between cultures. First, the management of the local authority cannot meet the demands of the rapid increase of foreign visitors causing the place to suffer from social chaos . Take VT beach as an example, the occurrence of traffic congestion and inadequate parking areas stemming from the influx of global tourists leads to arguments and fighting in this place. The second reason is the misinterpretation of some behaviors that are accepted in one country but inappropriate for another. For example, in Western countries, kissing publicly is socially considered as a way to show a person’s love and gratitude towards others, while the etiquette is an obscene action for Easterners. Therefore, Vietnamese or Chinese people might react aggressively when seeing Westerners expressing their love in such a way in these Asian countries .
On the other hand, I believe that global tourism plays a pivotal role in minimizing the disparity between people from all over the world due to the better understanding about a new language and culture. To begin with, paying a visit to a country gives people a chance to enhance their language proficiency and break the language barrier. For instance, when one going on a trip to America, he can accumulate he slangs and idioms in English, which help avoid some misunderstanding due to the lack of vocabulary, communicate and strengthen the bonds between people. Furthermore, travelers from various countries can adopt and exchange some etiquette to make people know more about one another. In particular, if people from the East side of the globe can emulate the punctual manners of the West, they can assimilate into Western culture with ease.
In conclusion, though there might be some conflict aroused by international tourism, I must admit that it allows overseas visitors to experience different cultures and can therefore connect people through a mutual understanding.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.416 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12068711876 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.8289475299 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.071428571 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7857142857 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6428571429 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203086217198 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649790608868 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610920351404 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136802921887 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665058250472 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.11 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.