Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s recreation. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
At the present time, many ocean animals are taken from their sea environment and shifted them in wildlife parks for the sake of an entertainment for the people. As per my observation, demerits of this vogue certainly surpass the merits which shall be elaborated in the forthcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand, it is very unfortunate if a creature is separated from its family as they are taken and kept in the parks for the way of earning the money. Many babies have been removed from their mothers at an early age in order to train them so they can learn the special tricks.
Secondly, relocating these sea habitats create a bad impact on their personal growth. They are not able to indulge in another environment as they loved to live their lives in the ocean. They are treated as prisoners and kept them in the captive. They need a bigger space where they free enjoy and spent the time with their loved ones. For example, a recent survey shows that captive dolphins lived only 10 years as compared to the span of 20 years of those dolphins who lived in the sea.
On the other hand, keeping these creatures in amusement parks attract a lot of tourism because people want to see different sea mammals like dolphins, sharks etc. and also get to know about their growth. Furthermore, it plays a significant role in the development of a country. More parks in a country would increase a huge number of international tourists which will be fruitful for a country’s economy. For instance, a survey conducted in 2006 illustrated that 20 % of the income came from these visiting places.
To recapitulate, although there are pros and cons to removing the sea creatures from their natural habitat and the drawbacks outweigh the benefits because they need to be with their family and thrive in their environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75555555556 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6363855487 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6709973616 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8666666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283831772714 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832815177657 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577807302516 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155418756371 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310585743213 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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