Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s recreation. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.
There is no doubt that in today's era variety of marine life can easily be observed by the assistance of upcoming latest technologies. While, there are many advantages of viewing these sea beasts in funfair parks, we should also consider the disadvantages it causes. I do not completely agree with the views and will support my explanation with relevant examples.
On the one hand, theme parks have become a popular arena where variety of marine lives can be seen. This is because, many big companies are using modern technology, which are capable of shifting these creatures from their natural habitat to artificial tanks. For example, the UK news channel telecasted a program about, a rare species of blue whale that can now be viewed by million of people in the British aquarium. As a result, children could acquire knowledge about different species existing on our planet. In contrast this capture has led to many human atrocities on sea life by separating it from its families.
On the other hand, ocean lifeforms survive well in their natural habitat. The reason is that, these creatures happily procreate in herds, which help them to sustain their existence. For example, in my opinion, I have observed many incidents of sea animals aggressively attacking their handlers, which has led to many medical emergencies. As a result, the marine-life authorities are compelled to kill these animals for future safety purposes. However, funds are required to save these rare ocean species, which can easily be provided by amusement park owners. Therefore, whether an animal is living in natural ecosystem or is captured to be kept in funfair parks, their species should be protected and promoted.
In conclusion, while many sea animals are kept in theme parks for knowledge and recreational purposes, personally I believe these animals belong to their natural environment and should not be disturbed at all.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14469453376 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72336447319 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588424437299 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0487232588 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.666666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19006115347 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637435445075 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422895078649 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114654268966 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374631682014 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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