Nowadays many families have both parents working Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children while others think childcare centers provide the best care Discuss both view and give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, many parents are busy for working, and they need someone can take care of their children. While others thinks that childcare centers may help them and provide a good care, I believe it is better when children are looked after by grandparents.
One side, people think that children should be taken to childcare centers for some reasons. First of all, because there are professional centers, their employees are trained carefully so they have better skills to take care of children. For example, when a child fall and hurt, staffs of the centers can have a quickly react and make first aid for them. Moreover, children have a chance to make friends when they come to childcare centers. This will help improve their communication skill. If children are taken care of by their family members, they may be feel lonely.
On the other hand, I believe that it is more better when grandparents look after their grandchildren. Firstly, grandfather have many experiences to take care of children, so it make easily for them to do this. Such as, grandparents know how to appease their child when they are crying. Secondly, grandparents are family members, so they love their grandchildren more than anyone. They can spend more time to take care of them. Finally, children who are looking after by their family members have the ability to be family-oriented and to be more affectionate.
In conclusion, while there are have some advantages when taking children to childcare centers, I think that it is more better if children are taken care of by their grandparents.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 41, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...On the other hand, I believe that it is more better when grandparents look after their gran...
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Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...riences to take care of children, so it make easily for them to do this. Such as, gr...
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Line 4, column 32, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...onate. In conclusion, while there are have some advantages when taking children to...
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Line 4, column 115, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...o childcare centers, I think that it is more better if children are taken care of by their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95817490494 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7284594608 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48288973384 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3920267229 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9333333333 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330436926233 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128711902037 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626779181225 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246336340769 0.151304729494 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480547557347 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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