Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras.) In many cases, the people being monitored are unware that this is happening.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
There are different opinions regarding this issue whether controlling individuals by cameras or through phones while in sometimes they are not aware of that is useful or not. According to statistics there are both pros and cons to this statement. While some argue that the drawbacks of being monitoring may outweigh the benefits, the more logical is otherwise as it prevents crimes and enhance security.
It is clear from the figures that these days criminal activities have soaked significantly and the first and fore most reason is that playing violence games has increased among youngsters that has detrimental effects on youths’ behavior. As a result, by controlling them we stop them from doing any things against rules. For instance, nowadays young people play a game named Blue Whale and they do everything that the Whale tells them like killing someone or jumping from the bridge, fortunately police arrested all of them by using its cameras.
Secondly, when everyone knows that he is monitoring he try not to disobey rules and people feel more sate due to the fact that they know the police will persecute offenders if crime or robbery happen. For example, a thief who has stolen a cellphone in the underground can be found immediately by watching the CCTV. In addition, the number of refugees have leaped recently causes many offences in the countries which accept immigrants and the cameras assist police in this regard.
In conclusion, it can be deduced from previously stated issues that although a few people may disagree with this statement that checking individuals with cameras or through phones has more disadvantages than advantages, what common sense rules is otherwise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
...everyone knows that he is monitoring he try not to disobey rules and people feel mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1425.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16304347826 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70402267101 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641304347826 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3042412888 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.5 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229320356806 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735555798453 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391660039537 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11800143737 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0111127445355 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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