Nowadays, technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing ( for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the peple being monitored are unaware that this is happening.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.
In recent years, it has been increasingly common to see track installations to monitor movements and private conversations through digital devices. Whether the use of detector devices is beneficial for life in routine or not remains controversial. From my perspective, the advantages of this development may outweigh the disadvantages.
To begin with, whereas the demand to enhance personal information, the establishment of tracking devices is playing an important role in the daily life of humans. Due to the fact that it ensures citizen safety by the expansion of scale in the hood and on the street through the security cameras such as CCTV, cellphone tracking,…As a deterrent to criminals. Moreover, there is no doubt that this has been reducing an abundance of potential lawbreakers by accurate identification of the criminal thereby the police department can analyze evidences from the scene and determine exactly the figure as well as the location of victims to contain the rescue measures as soon as possible.
However, as this is commonly available for most individuals to use, the capitalization of the crime on these tracking digital devices, which may be pernicious to the livelihood of residents as well as it can be invaded personal information can be used for financial gain. Whereas the myriad victims of stalker through the monitor that being leaked the sensitive information such as social security number, username, and password, email,…Additionally, the inrush of suspicious individuals on the business meeting that is recorded the conversation above through the devices.
To sum up, there is no doubt that security by the quasi-intelligent gizmos is playing an essential role in our daily routine by it provide a shield for our private information. Moreover, not only monitored by the police apartment but we are also being stalked by the detrimental individuals that demand us to pay attention in order to prevent the risks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, no doubt, such as, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34627831715 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29351273714 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553398058252 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5459992423 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.2 106.682146367 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229686216835 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804477634902 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506141179176 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131045635294 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587762055358 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.