Some people argue that the government should give every unemployed person a mobile phone and should make sure they have access to the Internet.
They believe this is the best way of using public money to reduce the problem of unemployment.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As the number of unemployed people are on the increase and are considered at the expense of several countries, some individuals believe that the government should provide a mobile phone to them in order to approach the Internet. While some people think that this is the most efficient method to reduce the impact of unemployment. From my perspective, I strongly disagree with this statement that this policy should not be released as the disadvantages can outweigh the advantages.
It is understandable why some people think that too much of government budget such as money and time is currently being spent on social issues. Advocates may argue that unemployment is the most pressing issue due to the negative impacts. For instance, nations, where unemployment and poverty are rife, are in dire need of funding to remedy such problems and raise living standards as soon as possible. Therefore, the disadvantages of this problem are threatening the livelihood of civilizations such as the economy due to the decrease of income as well as social crimes.
However, notwithstanding the fact that compared to the urgent needs, allocating money to the unemployed by purchasing them a phone is definitely a misspend from the government. In order that the unemployed should be looking for a justification on the grounds of political necessity without finding a job just a waste of money. The Internet can be beneficial so as to access information rapidly, but the potential of mobile phones on the hand of the unemployed would not be maneuvered rightly. Thus, instead of purchasing on this issue, the government should have been looking for a more efficient method as well as concentrating on the other aspects, such as healthcare and education.
In conclusion, unemployment is always a thing that is harmful to the living standards of several nations. In order to solve this problem, governments should encourage the unemployed or provide jobs to them rather than giving them a mobile phone and access to the Internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...them in order to approach the Internet. While some people think that this is the most...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...y purchasing them a phone is definitely a misspend from the government. In order that the ...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...f money. The Internet can be beneficial so as to access information rapidly, but the pot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13373860182 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05773263151 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507598784195 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.2354235129 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.923076923 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336750792239 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11436720883 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670119340206 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212056552373 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051759927472 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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