Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
With the support of advanced technology, well-known entertainers and athletes easily get a reputation and immediately become the idols of the young generation all over the world. Although sports stars are not good role models, I believe that they have a positive influence on individuals and society.
Firstly, professional athletes grab the attention of youngsters because they display extremely developed skills, also own attractive bodies and healthy lifestyles that everybody admires a lot. As a result, young people who consider sports stars as ideal models might potentially engage in regular exercise, keep fit and make good habits such as joining a gym club or running. Thanks to the celebrities who stimulate talented people to take part in various competitions, and dedicate themselves to the country in the international arena.
Moreover, sports celebrities also produce a positive impact on our society. Some sports stars spend their time doing voluntary work, and charitable activities, which motivate the young generation to contribute to the community. For instance, Le Cong Ving, a talented football player from Vietnam, donated entire his life-saving for charitable funding. In addition, their immoral actions can be seen as valuable lessons for adolescents.
To sum up, it could not be sure that every sports celebrity is a good example and always behave morally. However, their contribution is obvious to both young individuals and society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You should probably use 'star'.
Suggestion: star
...tive impact on our society. Some sports stars spend their time doing voluntary work, ...
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Line 4, column 44, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...sum up, it could not be sure that every sports celebrity is a good example and always ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1245.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 224.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55803571429 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94745314978 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.678571428571 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5809476397 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.181818182 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7272727273 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226936433681 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725598852194 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573084130877 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119527819707 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156253347899 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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