People have different views on whether it is beneficial for the investment be used for building new fast trains between cities. It is clear to me that the budget should be spent on improving existing transportation infrastructure first.
On the one hand, some people believe that the government need to spend a huge amount of money on developing the high speed transportation in order to cut the time of travel between two cities. For example, after fast trains have constructed in Taiwan, it is easier for traveler to go to KaoHsiung from Taipei. In the past, people used to spend 6 to 7 hours arriving KaoHsiung, yet it only take 1.5 hours now. Nevertheless, the new railway lines can also bring the money for the government on the basis that the economy will be prosper than before. Tourism is one of the latest commercial patterns that can earn money from the travelers, the more convenient the cities are, the more tourists will be attracted, which in turn makes more revenue.
On the other hand, although there are some benefits on constructing high speed railway, I believe that there still have some problems the government need to measure first. The public transportation is one of the most important part of the cities so I think it is necessary to spend the budget on improving the buses or metro that the cities have already have. For instance, some of the buses in Taipei are old and some of them are even not functional, it is urgent that the city planner must replace and furnish the transport so that the citizens can have a pleasant travel experience.
In conclusion, Although the development of the high speed railway is important, I believe that the replacement and the improvement of public transport are more necessary than others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
Suggestion: takes
...7 hours arriving KaoHsiung, yet it only take 1.5 hours now. Nevertheless, the new ra...
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Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...s or metro that the cities have already have. For instance, some of the buses in Tai...
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Line 5, column 375, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...cities have already have. For instance, some of the buses in Taipei are old and some of the...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an have a pleasant travel experience. In conclusion, Although the development ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, nevertheless, so, still, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83443708609 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74843213775 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493377483444 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.2547671834 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.727272727 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4545454545 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363531216537 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133740261323 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564479416394 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215301046095 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611126989145 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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