Obesity in children is increasing health problem in Australia by 33% of them are suffering from it. Schools are responsible to monitor their students' eating and exercising habit.
To what extend do you agree?
The obesity rate in children is the omnipresence heath epidemic not only in Australia with the booming number of obese kids. Schools are responsible to control eating and exercising regime of their students; however, I partially agree with this perspective as the responsibility is well shared with parents to achieve remarkable results.
As far as schools are concerned, children spend their vast majority of time in schools. In fact, teachers are excellent at educating them the significance of healthy diet and exercise. In order to improve the trend, many schools have started serving healthy lunch options to avoid them to consume unhealthy food, not only it but also they have initiated compulsory exercise period, which includes yoga, swimming, running, and many more. In short, schools are contributing by adopting these innovative ideas in practice even though it is insufficient to achieve a drastic change.
To get the desirable improvement, apart from the education system, we need parents to be involved. To inspire children at schools only is not enough; hence, parents can make difference by avoiding unhealthy food, using more fresh ingredients and reducing the availability of snacks which are high in salt and sugar. Another positive approach is physical activities as these can make body to burn calories and decrease the weight. The parents’ role is only to push their kids to participate in any activities on a daily basis that can be anything from outdoor games to cycling. Obviously, these two approaches are enough to improve consistently.
Overall, it is beneficial that schools start taking positive steps to combat this complication although, the involvement of parents is needed. Hence, the collaborative contribution from both brings the number of obesity down.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, well, apart from, in fact, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43617021277 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9214456741 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613475177305 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1019496213 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.923076923 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170613345412 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547769950194 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451827875638 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103062904895 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561389403543 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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