Obesity was once considered a disease of adults; however, it is becoming increasingly
common among children. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done to help
children stay healthy?
Advancements in modern technologies have increased our standard of living. No matter how difficult and tedious the particular task is, due to technology it has become very convenient to do it sitting in one place. For instance, booking a train or hotel, we can do it from our home rather than personally visiting the booking office.
On the contrary, modern technology can affect our lives drastically. One of the negative effects which are seen among children is obesity. This happens because mobile phones, televisions, and gaming systems are introduced in their lives at an early age. Youngsters tend to get influenced easily by these technologies and spend a lot of time being in one place. This abates any physical exercises which the body might have experienced during the outdoor games which children used to do years ago. Earlier teenagers were involved in a lot of physical activities, therefore obesity problem was trivial among young people.
Nevertheless, solutions that can help in decreasing
the obesity problem between people of young age. Besides normal lectures, schools can introduce more physical activities, or sports classes, or yoga classes in their daily timetable. This will ensure the child is going through daily exercises and make them stay fit which will certainly help in declining the obesity issue.
Having junk is another problem which gives rise to, increasing fats in a child's body, because children love having tasty and various types of cuisines. But these cannot be healthy every time. Hence, parents should take care that their child should not have street or unhealthy food beyond the limit. Parents can make the same food items more tasty and healthy at home which children can enjoy at home rather than having it outside. If parents apply this trick then children can intake more healthy food and extra junk will be easily reduced from their child's diet.
In conclusion, parents should take care of what their child is having every day and should change their bad eating habits. Also making them do physical exercises daily through any sports activity or training, etc rather than letting them waste their time sitting in one place playing video games. Therefore these are the few ways in which the obesity issue among young age people can be tackled.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09814323607 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42722528433 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557029177719 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2816239988 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.85 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21292356102 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064731850627 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383734356554 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106534246408 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326188387817 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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