One of the best ways to teach children to manage their money is to let them control their budget from an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
It is commonly believed one of the most effective methods to educate children to utilize their money is to allow them to control their budget since they are young. However,I firmly believe that this is not the best way to assist children to manage their own budget since there some drawbacks to it.
Firstly,not all children have the capability to differentiate what is good and what is not.Having their mind not fully developed,they are likely to spend their money on unnecessary or even harmful products such as colorful packed snacks or more dangerous things such as drugs.As a result, not only parents run the risk of wasting their money without any benefits but also might brings harm to their
kids.For an example, researches had shown that over 70% of students are given the expenditure used their money on unhealthy snacks which are sold everywhere each week.
Secondly,there are lots of different ways which can also boost the child awareness of their money management.Continual reminding or showing children people having more economically disadvantaged individuals is also a effective way as well without needing to giving them the budget when you are just a kid.In addition,it also develops sympathy inside children toward people who are impoverished and helps them to be less calculating than giving them a fixed budget every time.
In conclusion,while allowing kids to control their own money from an early age is one of the best measures to teach children to manage their budget,it is undeniable that it does associate with its share of disadvantages and there are other methods in replacement as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14339622642 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93696442896 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 53.0 20.2975951904 261% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 171.265875177 49.4020404114 347% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 272.6 106.682146367 256% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 53.0 20.7667163134 255% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.6 7.06120827912 348% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42514694662 0.244688304435 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.242445249552 0.084324248473 288% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765810289932 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224773110197 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105066688577 0.056905535591 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.3 13.0946893788 224% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 17.68 50.2224549098 35% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 11.3001002004 212% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.42 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.2 10.1190380762 229% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 10.7795591182 223% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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