One of the consequences of improve medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
One of the results of modern medicine is that men and women are able to live longer. This essay will discuss that despite human overpopulation this can create, a healthier generation mean that the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages
Increasing in total humans on Earth is definitely the main drawback of advanced medical treatment. Many people are now diagnosed and cured easier, so more and more can be restrained from sickness, illness or death. And at some point, it will put a strain on the environment and lead to the depletion of natural resources, because coal, gas or oil is not unlimited. For example, a 2020 government report had established a connection between mineral depletion and death rate, with a 2% fall in the mortality rate can produce a 1% decrease in total amount of minerals on Earth. However, rising in total population is not the only reason for resource depletion and that the impact can be reduced with a public awareness campaign.
Strengthen hospitalisation can make humans become healthier and stronger than ever. There will be less excruciating pain and fewer incurable illnesses, making society become happier and full of life. Individuals will be allowed to contribute to the prosperity and development of nations and future generations. For example, Nguyen Nam, who had made significant contributions to the agriculture development of Vietnam, would have passed away many years ago because of diabetes had it not been for the improvement of rehabilitation today. This opportunity means that enhancing medical care is worthwhile and eclipse any drawbacks about overpopulation
In conclusion, the healthy opportunity given to people and the chance to be part of the world development far outweigh the supposed disadvantages of rising in human presence on Earth, while medical treatment is enhanced.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30375426621 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07070519472 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607508532423 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.0595677824 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.272727273 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180885895546 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056777809905 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664842570277 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12119105723 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065669859296 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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