one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, we can see many development in medical areas which resulted in reduction deaths caused by disease. We are now capable of curing many illnesses that were deadly before or increasing the survival rate. Some disease even had been wiped out completely due to proper vaccinations. All of this achievements seem great but could this have some hidden indirect negative effects that we can not see in first glance?
Natural selection, the main mechanism underlying evolution, works by removing the weak and giving more reproductive chances to strong. So if there were no medication against different diseases many people would have died (like what happened in the case of black plaque and so on), but the remaining population would have been resistant to the pathogen and passing this resistance to their children. By curing all or most of the patiants we are inhibiting this natural procedure from happening.
On the other hand by increasing the life expectancy, we are reducing the death rate while birth rate remains the same or even gets higher. Consequently, the population will grow more and more and since we have limited resources this will cause shortage in food, energy and many other disadvantages.
Now, the important point is to demonstrate if these possible problems outweigh the benefits or not. Personally, I think it is immoral not to use the current technology and knowledge for saving lives. Instead, we need to find solutions for the other issues it may cause, like expanding and resources and developing better medicine as the pathogens evolve.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, so, while, i think, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1315.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13671875 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75010819656 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65234375 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7958776674 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.583333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.092632633508 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.031035765735 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0217303791964 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0529557073256 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0102768645953 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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