One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Big breakthroughs in the field of medicine accompanied with better and more widely-available healthcare have brought a significant increase in the life expectancy globally. In my opinion, this represents a positive change, although various challenges have emerged along the way.

Reading through the historical records from just one century ago, it becomes easy to appreciate all the wonders of the modern medicine even more. People used to live in grimy conditions, and were dying from the diseases we can now cure with the single dose of antibiotics. Children mortality rates were astronomical, and reaching adulthood was not that common, yet nowadays we take it for granted. If people were strong enough to survive young-age illnesses, life-span was rather short, and being 60 was regarded as very old. The poorest people were the ones to suffer the most due to various diseases and premature death.

Today, however, thanks to all the progress in science and improved living conditions, the most developed nations are at the forefront of the completely new social crisis. The elderly are making up to one quarter of the total population in countries like Japan or Germany already, and this trend is showing no signs of slowing down. For the economy, this means more social expenditures and less tax revenues due to the decline in the working-age population. Faced with this challenge, policymakers are struggling to find a way to keep the current healthcare system operating, without destroying prospects for the future economic growth. In addition, providing pensions for the increasing number of retirees will be no less difficult.

In conclusion, I want to restate my position that the rising life expectancy should be regarded as a positive development. I believe that solutions will be provided for the challenges that follow this change, and that the future generations will be able to enjoy lives in the way we now cannot even imagine.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23248407643 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88523255901 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611464968153 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.2261589564 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 117.357142857 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139859564364 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443653161232 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250913483484 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779309239121 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00942091359623 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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