Parents of obese children should be punished for making them fat. Do you agree or Disagree?
it is argued that the responsibility of obesity gaining of children belongs to parents for which those guardians should be penalized. I agree with this view because punishment will insist parents to be careful about healthy diets alongside children’s physical activity to ensure physical fitness.
To begin with, punishment is likely to enforce the parents of fat boys and girls to practice healthy foods. Generally, a large portion of guardians fails to provide the regular nourishment in the home to their sons and daughters due to lack of knowledge on healthy diets although these parents deter their children to eat junk foods from outsides, namely chocolate, cold drinks, and other junk foods. The parents rarely arrange vegetables and milk in their daily food menu, as a result, their children take only sugar instead of having combined nutrition which causes fat accumulation. The reasons for this issue are associated with the ignorance of parents to learning about health and diets. Hence, legal punishment is urgent so that those parents can learn to make a safe and edible meal for their child which to reduce the chance of being bulky. For example, A recent study shows that the South Asian States parents are barely interested in made healthy foods, instead, they just eat rice and other lentils in major items, therefore strict gun laws should be taken into account to reduce the obesity level of boys and girls in these regions.
In addition, several parents need to be brought under rigorous jurisdiction so that they might let their children play with peers and take part in physical activities. There is a traditional belief that children should spend more time in studies rather than playing with friends. because of huge academic pressure, those young boys and girls get a very small amount of time for physical accretion. it seems to me that punishments acted by the government will bound the fathers and mothers to allow their descendants to go outside for sporting. For instance, developed nations have initiated some restrictions at parenting if they confine children in four walls and it results in the increase of physical activities of children in the USA.
In conclusion, some parents overlook the diet menu of children and squeeze children to spend more time in studies avoiding the sporting significance which are the two-dominant factors of obesity gaining. Giving punishment to those parents may mitigate such issues in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16377171216 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60857665306 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565756823821 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.8587638631 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.733333333 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8666666667 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325264289763 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114549535313 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056711086606 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213931459902 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524466579596 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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