People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it.What are the causes of the problems?How to overcome it?

Essay topics:

People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it.
What are the causes of the problems?
How to overcome it?

In this world of technology, there is a tendency that many people are trying to keep an equilibrium between work and life. In this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons for this issue and suggest some solutions to tackle this issue.

In the modern world, the countries are more and more developed. In order to survive in competition in the workplace as well as to catch up the development, working people need to devote more time to improve their work overcomes, hence working overtime has become a common phenomenon. Furthermore, since we now live in a consumerist society, people face more material temptation than before. In order to fulfil their material desires, many people choose to sacrifice their personal time to work to earn more money. Consequently, due to the competitive working environment and material pursuit, people have less time to spend with family or do household works.

there is no doubt that these lifestyles negatively influence people’s physical and mental health, therefore this situation has to be changed. To begin with, people need to establish correct values toward money and family. if someone does not understand that the aim of work if for a better life, they would never succeed in the balance between work and life. reasonable allocation of time and work more efficiently could help people save more time. Furthermore, governments should impose laws about limiting working time to guarantee sufficient rest time for working people.

In conclusion, the competition and material desire are the reasons why most people fail to achieve a balance between work and life. In order to address this problem, both governments and individuals should make effort.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25454545455 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75040853464 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581818181818 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5881658129 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.214285714 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260870249702 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936546902948 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681236780999 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162341454239 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542531324484 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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