People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university?

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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university?

The majority of people get enrolled in tertiary education for many different accounts. I suppose that the motivation of the people continues their degree in a college or a university sourced from parent’s demand and self-will.

To begin with, many of student attend from secondary education to the university because the parents of the pupils want their children to obtain the highest achievement of the degree. The degree represents dignity in society for some many parents, which is the degree obtained as high as possible gives respectability among their relatives and neighbors. To those, meanwhile, who have an economically-challenged under the standard of living, obtaining the degree in the university could help the student's family in improvement of family income as well as collateral relative.

On the other hand, some of the students truly realize that continuing the study from senior high school to the tertiary education is a compulsion to them self. They understand that someone is not able to achieve a better career without attending the course in the university. In the Hasanuddin University, for instance, there is a department assisting the student of the university to set up their career goals in advance. The department of career center also prioritizes to help the college students whose get a poor situation, such as less family income and orphan, through the counseling until they can get a job. Additionally, self-reliance of pupils regarding increased knowledge is one of the factors in this accounts.

To sum up, I reaffirm that many of pupils apply to the tertiary education due to requesting from parents and self-reliance.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... get enrolled in tertiary education for many different accounts. I suppose that the motivation...
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Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...degree in the university could help the students family in improvement of family income ...
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Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...lateral relative. On the other hand, some of the students truly realize that continuing ...
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Line 5, column 711, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ased knowledge is one of the factors in this accounts. To sum up, I reaffirm that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, second, so, well, while, for instance, i suppose, such as, as well as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30566037736 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15634155155 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539622641509 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4572317996 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.818181818 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0909090909 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2727272727 7.06120827912 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217266854379 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830254599379 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576766253322 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131685128797 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828636097412 0.056905535591 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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