People believe that children should aim to their best at what they are doing while others believe it is not necessary for them Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

People believe that children should aim to their best at what they are doing while others believe it is not necessary for them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some individual argues that kids should emphasis their best on their passion where as other says it is not mandatory for them. This is because the children will get more achievement on the other hand they will get a stuck at only one thing.

The children who focus on their aim from a very young age can definitely get more success in that particular field. As they have a straight gold to fulfill only and with the practice of many years they will becme perfect in their work. By practicing they can make different records. For example, Sachin Tendulkar the God of cricket started practicing from a very young age and with that he become master of the game and won the world cup.

On the other hand, on aiming only at their best thing the children will remain eligible for one work only. They will not be able to do anything or learn and experience different things rather than their work. If they get engaged in each type of works they will become all rounder and they will achieve success in every field definitely. For example, many childrens who are good at their studies do not participate in any other activities this makes them to rely on only one field.

In conclusion, doing their best makes children to efficient in that particular field as well as they will rely on only one work. In my opinion, it is important for a child to participate in all the work as they will become self dependent and can take any field in their future as they become comfortable with different works also.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...ld emphasis their best on their passion where as other says it is not mandatory for them...
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Line 7, column 285, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n take any field in their future as they become comfortable with different works ...
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Line 7, column 327, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...become comfortable with different works also.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54981549815 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.306529875 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494464944649 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8746764222 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.75 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238439465696 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110456841862 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598767925414 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171554348769 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051486938872 0.056905535591 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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