Some people think that children should aim to be the best at what they are doing while others
believe it is not necessary for them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Some individuals believe that it is crucial for youngsters to set a goal of ranking the first in which they are pursuing while others assume that it is unnecessary for them. From my perspective, while the former view is plausible to a certain extent, I would side with those who support the latter argument.
On the one hand, those who advocate that aiming to the best should be considered by the young generation tend to point out a combination of evident explanations. The initial explanation is that setting a goal to be the best in any activities or areas may come in handy for young individuals to derive a great deal of motivation. In fact, if there is not any aim of ranking the first, hardly do the young people have perseverance and determination to follow what they desire. Another factor is that in order to stay focused on the progress, it is extremely essential for the young to aim to be the best. For example, without being determined and focused to give the best academic performance at school, children could easily get distracted by friends or other recreational pastimes which may cause a decline in academic results.
On the other hand, as sensible and beneficial as it is, I concur with those who advocate the view that there is no point in trying to be the best in what the young are doing. Initially, children being too competitive to get the best result possibly takes its toll on relationships. As a matter of fact, always trying to beat others can erode social relationships and dissuade collaborative behaviors because there is only one “first place” and just one can achieve that position. Additionally, being obsessed with the goal of ranking the first in any activities or areas can trigger various health problems. If a child is always put under pressure to get the first place in class, it is likely that this would lead to anxiety, anger and even autism if worse comes to worst.
In conclusion, as both dark and bright sides of the picture are noticed, it is understandable why many people believe that children should aim to get the highest positions in which they follow, however, I am convinced that it is not crucial for them..
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...onvinced that it is not crucial for them..
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75197889182 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7572041757 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514511873351 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.3437287771 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.538461538 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1538461538 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31637754114 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104188077535 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663616187027 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187261343499 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532927809787 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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