People should look after their health for personal benefits, rather than a duty for a society. What extent do you agree or disagree?
It is a common belief that people take care of their physical state for their own advantages instead of social responsibilities. In my opinion, while I agree we should ensure our health for individual benefits, I am against the view that we should not do this as social obligation.
To begin with, there are many benefits to people if they pay more attention to their well-being. To be more specific, by enhancing health condition, people can effectively focus on work and achieve higher productivity, which enables them to climb up their career ladder. In addition, maintaining a good health helps people not only invest in their future life but also provide them with opportunity to pursue their own passion. For example, if we have a good health, we can travel around the world, work for longer hours without exhaustion, earn more money as well as make our life more meaningful.
However, as a part of society, citizens should also have a sense of responsibility for the health of people surrounding us. If an individual does not pay attention to his health care, he will pose a great threat to others. To specify, inhaling secondhand smoke can result in damage to respiratory system, which leads to some diseases such as lung cancer, asthma. Besides, the more sick people increase, the heavier pressure can be put on national budget. If all citizens are healthy, the medical expenses will be low. Hence, the government can allocate this money to more important sectors like education or infrastructure, which helps to boost economic development.
In conclusion, I believe that maintaining a good health should be taken into consideration because this benefits not only every single person but also the whole community.
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...hile I agree we should ensure our health for individual benefits, I am against th...
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... person but also the whole community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, second, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06993006993 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85423501805 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608391608392 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0735369042 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.538461538 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24141087068 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820610368916 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710968839991 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147971344657 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723125414266 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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