People should look after their health for personal benefits, rather than a duty for a society. What extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a heated debate on whether people should pay more attention to their wellness for personal advantages or their social responsibility. I believe that individuals should take care of their health for both reasons.
On the one hand, I can explain why people have to be careful about their well-being for personal benefits. To be healthy allows people to be independent and do any activity that they like to perform. These individuals can progress in different fields, such as sports. By contrast, ill people are limited in the range of activities that they are willing to do. For example, disabled people or those with heart problems are not permitted to play football or people suffering from diabetes are advised to stop the consumption of sugar and rice. Additionally, I think that healthful people are more likely to be in better shape and appearance compared to their sick counterparts. Individuals with good health conditions have brighter eyes, softer skin and stronger hair with high quality. As a result, such people can better enjoy their lives.
On the other hand, one of the social obligations of people is to try to be healthy. People with health problems can be a burden to society, as they are a main financial drain on the government budget. When people become ill and are forced to stay at home, the state not only has to spend more money on medical services but also receives less money in tax. Also, these individuals can be a threat to others especially when their illness is contagious. So, it can be argued that unhealthy people can hurt the economy of their country and provide more responsibilities for their family members to look after them. I claim that if people want to be productive members of their society, they should adhere to their social liability and try to be healthy.
In conclusion, in my view, people should look after their well-being for the sake of society and themselves.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, well, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89634146341 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69878902934 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524390243902 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8291043999 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4705882353 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271068388267 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104013335145 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802583334197 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228216309031 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656658718115 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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