A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
It is evident in our society that social status and material possessions have been extensively used as the benchmarks in forming a perception of one’s personal worth. While I believe that this is acceptable to some extent, yet the traditional values are equally important.
Until the recent time, it is sad to see that many powerful and wealthy people are often linked to corruption and greed. Yet, it is the extensive coverage of ultra-rich, celebrities or authorities misusing their power that has significant negative impact on our perception of social status and material possession. If these benchmarks are used with good intention, they can be a good indicator of a person’s achievement. Let us not forget that many people have successfully climbed and become on the top of the social ladder with a hard-working attitude and great determined. This means that the role they play also come with great responsibility, for example, a CEO of a company or a president of a nation, and can have significant economic and political impact on a country. Reasonably, these people receive great financial rewards for the efforts and risks they invest. Hence, they have a greater purchasing power of owning lands, vehicles or technological devices, which they may hardly have the time to enjoy. Unfortunately, such possessions are often ill-perceived by the public when reported by the media.
Despite the motivation of the social status and materialism can bring, they can cause people go down to the wrong paths when misusing authority or showing off their branded cars, clothing or luxurious properties. With that said, traditional values such as honour, kindness and trust are equally crucial. These are the values that help people to be successful, improve a country’s economy and create a peaceful society. For example, most workers in Toyota car manufacturing company are proud to serve the company and strive to produce the best quality and affordable vehicles in the world. In Japan, generosity and trustworthiness, which are highly valued in the society, build up a harmonious society and public services such as police are truly efficient and reliable.
To conclude, in my opinion, the notion of social status and possessions can motivate a person, to some extent, striving to achieve their goals. However, the old-fashioned values that have been practised for hundreds of years are equally essential in defining a personal worth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, so, while, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 392.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27806122449 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00508796469 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533163265306 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9620097841 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.705882353 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0588235294 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171460579913 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564826016843 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478535060335 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122356373821 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350026769795 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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