A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
In a world where a capitalistic-driven globalization shapes our nowadays society, with all of its positive and negative effects, this statement focuses on a particular aspect of our life: people's judgement of a person's worth and the change in values that is happening.
By analyzing it, I agree with the fact that this is an issue becoming more and more evident in our timeframe, however I do not think that this shift in values of our society also affects people who are close to us. In this close environment, these so-called old-fashioned values are still considered important for judging a person's worth.
Society puts value on a person's success, it does not emphasize his or her positive attributes or ethic values that may be felt as important. These are the building blocks that drive their life and their real relations with other people, but these values tend to receive little to no attention when we are thinking of the meaning of success.
It is also important to note that we, as humans, like to accumulate things, a primitive behaviour which has been exploited by capitalism. It is hence clear that because we live in such a system, we are almost geared to think that the more material possessions a person has, the more happiness that same person has to experience.
In this picture, things like kindness, trust, and emphaty do not lead to reaching these so-called goals we are prompted to achieve. They may, on the countrary, be a burden that prevents us from reaching these goals.
In conclusion, we can confidently say that this shift in values our society is experiencing is real in the big picture, but tends to lose appeal in close environments such as friends or family. We are driven to think that a person's worth is made of its success or material possessions but this, in the end, may not be the best approach we could have for living in a overall happier society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 20, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
... that is happening. By analyzing it, I agree with the fact that this is an issue becoming more and more...
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Line 3, column 25, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...persons worth. Society puts value on a persons success, it does not emphasize his or h...
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Line 6, column 364, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...st approach we could have for living in a overall happier society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75987841945 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7713931691 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54103343465 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.7927937964 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.363636364 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9090909091 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209045820119 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838089730405 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543514441925 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10636191618 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043357433842 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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