Playing a musical instrument is the most important achievement for any child.
Personal Opinion, agree or disagree?
A statement issues that it is the most impressive attainment for every child when they demonstrate ability to tune a musical instrument. However, I tend to disagree with this argument due to some plausible reasons, which I will explain why in this essay.
On the one hand, it might be said that skill to play wonderful music is tremendous achievement due to its benefits. Firstly, performance on musical instrument could offer children to gain cognitive benefits, such as reading and listening skills. For example, in order to beat the time signature that whether note should be played or lyric should be sung, when learning musical instrument, musicians should constantly read and comprehend sheet music; besides, they also have to intently listen not only to instruction but also for rhythm, pitch and speed. Secondly, it is possible for children to adopt positive attitude, because learning to play a musical instrument would stimulate constant process of learning for children to be taken place in daily live. This could be taken towards how musicians learn constantly to tune instrument, in which they should listen avidly with Infinite patience.
Conversely, in my perspective, playing a musical instrument could be disadvantageous for children. The processes to learn to play music, including listening instrument, reading sheet music, understanding time signature and tuning note, allows a significant amount of time. Children thus would have inappropriate time to study in terms of educational objective that any child should pursue. Moreover, not all children enjoy greatly music. I am certain that the benefits above would not probably be gained if a child had a passive interest in music, meaning that kids cannot just take a seat and listen to the instrument in order to acquire ability to play a musical instrument. As a result, for those kids who have other passions, it is more essential to engage in other pursuits, such as active sport which is advantageous for not only children’s cognition or attitude but also their physical health.
In conclusion, in spite of the potential benefits, it is clear to me that achievement of a musical instrument not only could curb learning activities in terms of academic aims but also should not be compulsory for any child.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...should not be compulsory for any child.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20596205962 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90661745441 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528455284553 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1214251509 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.214285714 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3571428571 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305264955528 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120996840179 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629695647298 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203700195518 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266557058545 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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