Music is essential to any individual's life and being able to master any kind of musical instrument at early age is what any parents desire. Personally, I do not entirely agree with this, and I will explain why in this essay.
Firstly, the ability to play an instrument fluently takes up most of a child's leisure time. I believe that young learners' timetable needs to be divided reasonably so as to maximize their overall abilities. Rudimental skills in surviving and the importance of achieving adequately performance at school curriculum are not something that can be hinderred. Furthermore, consideration of playing an musical instrument is pivotal will deviate their children from other vital purposes, for instances, spending necessary quality time with their parents, taking part in outdoor activities with other classmates. Finally, every child is inherited mainly from their own parents' genes, not to mention, each child is greatly affected by the environment which they are living in. The human brain receive all inputs from outside and gradually develop autonomous behaviour which leads to a particular reaction to different kind of situation. Some of the kids react positively when hearing a serene sound, the other may typically show interested in colors and shapes. If a child being forced to do something that a chemical reaction does not occur then it is unlikely that that child will pursuing in music in the future.
I do appreciate that some people think differently, saying that achieving such a high reward at younger age is not only benificial to themselves but also to the parents and society overall. Yet I believe it only applies to a minority group of children where they have shown full potential in pursuing music career.
To conclude, I feel that being able to play a musical instrument at younger age is to strive for. However it needs to be a gradual process and is in the child's interest.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
Music is essential to any individuals life and being able to master any kind ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'learners'' or 'learner's'?
Suggestion: learners'; learner's
...ilds leisure time. I believe that young learners timetable needs to be divided reasonabl...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...imetable needs to be divided reasonably so as to maximize their overall abilities. Rudim...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
.... Furthermore, consideration of playing an musical instrument is pivotal will devi...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...eaction to different kind of situation. Some of the kids react positively when hearing a se...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y show interested in colors and shapes. If a child being forced to do something th...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'pursue'
Suggestion: pursue
...hen it is unlikely that that child will pursuing in music in the future. I do appreci...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...rument at younger age is to strive for. However it needs to be a gradual process and is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, as to, for instance, i feel, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06289308176 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7778315726 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591194968553 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1139147727 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262072326782 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079191518337 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691890379675 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149569205854 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590353996198 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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