"The power of modern devices lies in their ability to allow us to connect, but at the same time, disconnect with each other. We now have more relationships online, but at the same time, less relationships offline."
In your opinion, does technology bring us closer together or further apart? Use reasons and specific examples from your own knowledge or experience to support your answer.
Write your essay in at least 300 words and in no more than 500 words.
The popularity and ubiquity of modern devices and the advent of information technology has evolved at a speed of such magnitude difficult to access, along with the proliferation of social networking sites has bestowed us with the ability to create a greatly increased number of connections with others. Although this revolution may come with a repercussion of a possibility of drifting offline connections away, I strongly believe that adopting modern technology has been a cornerstone in establishing more interhuman connections over the past decades.
With the exponentially growing prevalence of electronic devices, we can observe a devastating effect on off-screen relationships, mostly due to overuse. Influenced by both undue pressure of work and personal desire, people now devote an unproportionally high amount of their time reserve to electronic devices, depriving them of time with their family. A story of a first-grader who wishes that he could be a mobile phone so that his parents would have more time with him instead of bounding up in such an insentient object has shown how much we have been indulging ourselves in the comfort of modern devices whilst thinking no more of our beloved ones. Not only adults but also their offspring, with the advent of video games and social networking sites, have allocated much more of their time to smartphones and computers than to talking with their family members and families, thus widening the generation gap.
But for the technological revolutions and evolution of the Internet, we would not have been able to achieve the magnitude of interhuman relationships as we have today. The formation and flourishing of instant-messaging systems and online social networking sites that allow us to communicate effortlessly and instantaneously notwithstanding the extent of geographical distance around the globe, and people of similar interests can easily find fellows within online groups or servers on those systems. To exemplify this, we can have a look at Facebook, which has long been a reliable way for groups and clubs to recruit their members, and Discord with a wide range of “servers” relating to specific topics have attracted and aided people in making new friends. Technology has also played a key role in maintaining and sustaining old relationships, where instead of having to meet each other directly or wasting time waiting for letters over far distance, keeping in touch with, for example, childhood friends, far relatives has been made easier just through a phone call or a message. More than that, the availability of video calls has also made steps in simulating more of a real meeting, which connects us even more.
In conclusion, although there may be some unfavorable adverse effects from abusing technology on existing relationships, I strongly reaffirm the importance of technology in aiding people to connect and sustain existing connections.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 1615.20841683 153% => OK
No of words: 462.0 315.596192385 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33982683983 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12680974003 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 176.041082164 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569264069264 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 506.74238477 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.2975951904 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2527020616 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 205.583333333 106.682146367 193% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5 20.7667163134 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31238398656 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10479083174 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388977054554 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163434990984 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678783687672 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 13.0946893788 176% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.45 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 11.3001002004 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.51 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 78.4519038076 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 22.0 9.78957915832 225% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.1190380762 170% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 1615.20841683 153% => OK
No of words: 462.0 315.596192385 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33982683983 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12680974003 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 176.041082164 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569264069264 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 506.74238477 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.2975951904 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2527020616 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 205.583333333 106.682146367 193% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5 20.7667163134 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31238398656 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10479083174 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388977054554 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163434990984 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678783687672 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 13.0946893788 176% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.45 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 11.3001002004 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.51 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 78.4519038076 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 22.0 9.78957915832 225% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.1190380762 170% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.