Some people think that success should be measured by the material possessions a person has acquired while others think it should be judged by the knowledge he or she has.
There live diversified opinions about what could be determinants of success. One conspicuous view of which is that success should be assimilated into the accomplishment of tangible properties whereas others believe rather how much knowledge a person has acquired to be the factor. This essay will delve deeper into both of these views, and state my opinion that neither of these factors alone would live up to such a role.
In the materialistic society we are living in today, money is the key to achieving from necessities to luxurious passions, whose reflection is usually through the possession of tangible assets, thus making a person with opulence very likely to be regarded as successful. However, this view is flawed by dints of not taking into account other criteria such as family life or contribution to society. Take into example the case of Trung Nguyen Group, whose founder conflicted with his wife and put his family in a split or the affluent people controlling drug businesses, gaining most of their financial status through illegal means. In addition, not all progression throughout a person's life, such as academic achievement, mental would evaluate to cash. Accordingly, using money as the sole indicator would remain insufficient for assessing success.
Analogously, unaccompanied knowledge is inadequate as a measurement criterion of success. People who believe otherwise may stoke up a forgone conclusion that individuals with an ample amount of knowledge have the ability to make sensible decisions throughout their life, thus making them achievers. However, this idea suffers from a grave misapprehension of the relationship between knowledge and wisdom. The former bears no direct correlation to the latter, which means that any adult with an abundance of knowledge attained, such as in-depth facts, details, information of a situation or multiple topics, is not necessarily able to make sound decisions, but to be precise, it is the utilization of such knowledge enables one to and is what truly defines success. So often depicted in a multitude of TV shows such as "Way to Olympia peak" are individuals who demonstrated vast intellectual understanding across segments of life, but setting aside such knowledge-niched talent, not much of them have been heard of great contributions to society.
In conclusion, although either knowledge and materialistic affluence may be a necessity to succeed, but singularly insufficient to guarantee so. In my opinion, wisdom where one is able to make thorough decisions with regards to ethnicity, laws and one's wishes is what would define one's success.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...how much knowledge a person has acquired to be the factor. This essay will delve ...
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Line 2, column 678, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ition, not all progression throughout a persons life, such as academic achievement, men...
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Line 4, column 248, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ons with regards to ethnicity, laws and ones wishes is what would define ones succes...
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Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ws and ones wishes is what would define ones success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, may, so, thus, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 412.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38106796117 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10013222666 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589805825243 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.7823963222 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.8 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4666666667 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186081253217 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654205813127 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687081644614 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113187450839 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533120625242 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...how much knowledge a person has acquired to be the factor. This essay will delve ...
^^
Line 2, column 678, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ition, not all progression throughout a persons life, such as academic achievement, men...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 248, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ons with regards to ethnicity, laws and ones wishes is what would define ones succes...
^^^^
Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ws and ones wishes is what would define ones success.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, may, so, thus, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 412.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38106796117 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10013222666 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589805825243 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.7823963222 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.8 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4666666667 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186081253217 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654205813127 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687081644614 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113187450839 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533120625242 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.