In the past, sports champions used to be motivated by the desire to win a match or to break the world records. These days, they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous. What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves?
Famous sport participants these days are deemed to be more determined toward fame and fortune in contrast to their seniors, who had a higher tendency of being motivated primarily by their inclination to be victorious or to create far superior records to their predecessors. This shift in attitude leaves behind noticeable effects on both the youth and the sport industry itself which will be discussed in this essay.
Taking money and popularity as primary stimuli spreads misconceptions about the meaning of sports among the young generations. With professional athletes being paid more and more astronomical amount of cash prizes, people will regard sport as more of an occupation rather than simply a way of staying in shape and healthy. Besides that, the luxurious lifestyles led by prominent athletes are also step by step encouraging hedonism. Moreover, winners of competitions receive better attention and rewards than their failing counterparts, making winners even more famous while the talented but lost players cannot receive training from professional seniors, leaving behind a big difference between the victory and the lost.
The sport industry itself also receive negative changes from this change of heart. Sports now are highly commercialised, sport programs are filled with commercial advertisements from their sponsors, while tickets price are rapidly escalating. With attitude toward fame, sport participants will not make use of all their focus on performance but on the image they are presenting in accordance with the advertising companies they contracted. Viewers won't be able to watch incandescent performances as they used to before. With commercialization in place, atheletes would also have to face with negative issues like failing to make ends meet with salary or their contracts are broken with their rivals replacing their spots. These things in the long run will become much of a distraction, thus degrading performance and the real value of sport.
In conclusion, I believe sport is a lucrative industry and sport athletes should be paid for what they desire from their outstanding performance. However, the industry is slowly killing the real value of sport.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45747800587 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93094677511 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589442815249 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0213709989 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.928571429 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245266065233 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845851441059 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713110847879 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162785161737 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704280716996 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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