At present time, the population of some countries includes in relatively large number of young adults, compare with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweight the disadvantages.

Essay topics:

At present time, the population of some countries includes in relatively large number of young adults, compare with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweight the disadvantages.

Base on the presentation of population in the world that is increasing in every years there are some countries experience it, where growth of the young people higher than the older. This case is giving some effects as region because of some reasons.

Number of the younger is going up in several states where this happen influence some aspects which are becoming controversial in communities, especially for the disadvantage of it. For instance, Indonesia is one of state that experience rise of young adult dramatically as well as number of criminal which is extremely. Those matters have relation suspect of this crime majority is the young adult. As result, the young people tend to do commit an offence probably level of competition which is unsuitable with figure of population, therefore a criminal is last one way. In conclusion, the growing of population present some damages to society moreover will influence along with disturb community welfare.

On the other side, huge of younger give some positive happens despite number of population unbalance with the nature resources however jobs conversely this case will encourage them to improve their skill then tend to do something new. Firstly, young adult have a high spirit of youthful where they will becoming young generation in their places, at present moment an achievement adult who are helpful in society. Secondly, young adult are best leadership nevertheless they still need older role to give suggestion and told some experiences to them but the younger is continuer who will handle at all such as the development , welfare and others. As new generation.

To sum up, number of young adult which increase extremely is not give just damages but there are positive side of it even it is better to regeneration in every time. I belive that it is the best way to reach community comfort.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, however, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07516339869 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73467464146 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562091503268 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6654567893 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.461538462 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6153846154 7.06120827912 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272515012184 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902850246471 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460398992668 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162978585077 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431377428103 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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