At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In the state of this art society, there is a problem that it is occur in some countries which includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the amount of elder. this essay is going to discuss about this case.
In my considerate, there are many gain when a countries can whose a plenty of young person on high-tech frame. The young is someone who dynamic and benefit with 4.0 technology, with many creations. On the other hand, this is a society which always has poor and rich or knowledge labor and heavy labor by hand separation. With awareness, a countries have many young adults, will be more develop about formal and functions belong to their mental. For example, there were a lot of people started up and success with their business by open mind. Firstly, instead of they had to follow some advice from old-fashion ideals, they inquired and created more. Addition, the young of source provide a big number of worker for the factories, companies, supermarket, such as Apple, Samsung…. Moreover, the medicine service for elder will be take care better because it isn’t overloaded.
From my point of views, if the number of older people have lower than younger, the rate of population wouldn’t be balance. Hence, there are many issues can appear such as the young gradually older together day by day. Until a time, the number of young people and old people will change, in contrast with the first time, or it is going to overload if they want to have balance population. For instance, I saw several info in BBC about the amount of elder in Japan too much, they became crimes because they just want to be jail that have one reasons to answer why they want to do it. that about they don’t have enough food and money when they old, and in the prison all thing will be free.
In conclusion, I think two views have good and bad points, so the pros stills outstanding than the cons. Further, the government should change some benefits for older in their country, then that can help the to solve some bad situation in each countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'occurred'.
Suggestion: occurred
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Suggestion: This
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun gain seems to be countable; consider using: 'many gains'.
Suggestion: many gains
...case. In my considerate, there are many gain when a countries can whose a plenty of ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a country' or simply 'countries'?
Suggestion: a country; countries
...y considerate, there are many gain when a countries can whose a plenty of young person on h...
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Message: Did you mean 'who's'?
Suggestion: who's
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a dynamic'.
Suggestion: who is a dynamic
...n high-tech frame. The young is someone who dynamic and benefit with 4.0 technology, with m...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a country' or simply 'countries'?
Suggestion: a country; countries
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun info seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some info'.
Suggestion: some info
...balance population. For instance, I saw several info in BBC about the amount of elder in Jap...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, so, still, then, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71703296703 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42739485944 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56043956044 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2586095893 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4117647059 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251704748919 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779343787032 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888756321148 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169534633306 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107371369168 0.056905535591 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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