At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, the increasing tendency in some countries's population has shown clearly. While some countries several the increasing ageing population, several nations show the opposite when young people make up a higher proportion in the population pyramid in comparison with the elderly. Although this status bring the pros and cons, this essay tends towards the viewpoint that the benefits of this situation outweigh this drawback.
It is undeniable that the society with a large number of young generation might embody many disadvantages. The profound lack of experiences in working life is a serious issue. The young are not often furnished with enough essential soft skills to have adaptability as the old, so the ability to resolve the problem not good as senior citizens. Beside that, young people will become the mail reason why the proliferation of social evils and youth-related crimes. For example, the adolescents and youth population in African countries are increasing, but most of them are not offered enough education, explaining the booming of drub smuggling or violence recorded there. All most evidence suggest many young people have an appetite for showing themselves in a negative way, so their society might endure the high incidence of social problems.
On the other hand, I think that a society with many young people may take advantages of this situation's benefits. All most young generation have the enthusiasm and they open-minded about many issues. They have well-nourished and well=educated so they can bring unprecedented levels of growth and social progress to their region. Moreover, young people are willing to embrace new ideas, have foray into new challenges in lieu of erring on the side of caution when facing them. Also, the juvenile generation have physically healthy and willing to work under a high pressure, which recently become the prerequisites for outstanding productivity at work. This helps pave the way for the rejuvenation of pivotal fields in a modern society life such as economy, science, technology,....
In conclusion, there are some reasons mentioned above, my opinion is that the young population is beneficial than the ageing population.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37790697674 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9101378162 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59011627907 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3962244384 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.625 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243345464659 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073439938937 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590589970429 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139977583235 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477004602704 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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