At the present time,the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time,the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In some nations number of young generation overlap the highest percentage of total population as oppose to adult people.
From my point of view, this is an unbalancing situation, which in long-run may detrimental effect on the society.

Admittedly, when young people more than adult that means burgeon improvement of the country. In other words, hefty proportion of young devoted their life behind work, family and country, therefore, earning money,which they use for the betterment of the society. Besides that, young star are more energetic, so they also involve in some charitable work like blood donation, raising fund etc. To exemplify, in Bangladesh, larger number of young work in the abroad and send foreign currency, after analyzing survey found that 90 percent income contribution is by young people. Apart from this, young's are taking more risk for country. What I mean by this is that in different civil service such as the army or the police appoint people range from 20-40 and after 50 they retire from work, similarly, man made war, natural devastation wisely solved by vitalize young people.

On the other hand, adults are base of the society, without them whole generation jeopardize their values. This is because, adult persons are spend their life collecting experiences, if they do not show proper direction, young may underpin the society by taking unwanted risk, unethical activities. In addition, adult person take significant decision, hence, by considering all aspects of the situation or forecast the upcoming perspective. While older person overcome insurmountable obstacles, if young annihilate their undergoes, thus may impact on the whole society, more importantly, impede the future generation's enlargement.

I am strongly believe that disequilibrium of population hazardous for the upcoming circumstances, because adult elucidate the road of augmentation by sharing their experience, which must be followed by the next generation.

In conclusion, although the numerous inconvenience may deteriorate the higher percent of young generations advantages.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, may, similarly, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the whole, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59119496855 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94665330729 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632075471698 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.76152304609 273% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1622367922 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7857142857 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14947955118 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545202346892 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490734215869 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.076064617555 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637341722439 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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