It is true that people trait differently before an illness. Many feel that curing a disease is the most beneficial option, while others believe that a disease can only be treated by prevention. I totally agree with this statement, because I am of the view that investing in preventive ways has positive outcomes for both individuals and communities.
With regards to individuals, taking preventive measures has clear advantages in their own health. Indeed, people get used to healthier lifestyles in order to prevent a disease, including the most fatal ones, like diabetes, cardiovascular diseases or chronic kidney disease. In Australia, for instance, there was a famous campaign called “Prevention is better than cure” urging people to change their dietary habits aiming to prevent these diseases, focusing on keeping people active, getting healthy checks on a regular basis and eating a balanced diet. By reducing or eliminating the risk factors, which are highly responsible for the aforementioned illnesses, the quality of people’s lives could be improved. Clearly, if people focus on preventing diseases rather than curing them, they will maintain their health wellbeing.
On the other hand, the effect of investing in prevention rather than curing a disease has a positive impact on communities. Rather than building a new hospital, institutions and finance mechanisms of local communities should fund early actions, which are not such costly. Sweden’s government is a good example; by investing in targeting those most at risk of developing problems in the future, managed to save departmental budgets for other investments, mainly for education. Even if there are cultural issues which act as obstacles in investing in prevention, since governments are confined to support those already in need, I feel that such decisions would be advantageous for a community’s financial sector in the long term.
In conclusion, although many state that funding prevention is not an appropriate way to tackle with fatal diseases, in my opinion efforts of the present can prevent problems later. Investing in preventive measures has upsides for both individuals and societies
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many feels'.
Suggestion: Many feels
...le trait differently before an illness. Many feel that curing a disease is the most benef...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun state seems to be countable; consider using: 'many states'.
Suggestion: many states
...e long term. In conclusion, although many state that funding prevention is not an appro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49851632047 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00327522143 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614243323442 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3829615108 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.357142857 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0714285714 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277202369006 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953699208693 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624884539452 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162937544381 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266753440177 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.36 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.