Q12 : Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. what are the causes of this and what solutions can you suggest?
Recently, an increase in childhood obesity rates has become the subject of heated debate. There are several reasons for this phenomenon, such as unhealthy eating habits, and various measures could be taken to alleviate this issue, including launching a campaign. In this essay, I will explain the reasons for this undesirable trend, and present some solutions to the problems.
There do seem to be numerous causes underlying this phenomenon. Perhaps the most oft-cited cause is that a multitude of teenagers are addicted to junk food containing high fats and sugars in modern society, which exerts a detrimental influence on their health. This is partly because a myriad of fast-food chains are easily available anywhere. Another fundamental cause is that numerous primary and secondary school students often deprive themselves of a chance to take part in physical activities making it possible for them to keep fit given that in this fiercely competitive society, the majority of the youth put too much pressure on themselves in order to ameliorate their academic performance.
There are, however, several courses of action that both the government and individuals could take to address the root cause of the problems. The most practical solution to this problem is a government-sponsored awareness campaign. An effective advertising campaign could warn of the dangers of young people's obesity and hopefully, raise awareness amongst the public. For example, South Korea recently lobbied their adolescents to eat five portions of fruits and vegetables per day and this resulted in a dramatic decrease in youngsters' obesity rates. A second feasible solution would be for parents to participate in physical activities with their offspring at weekends. To provide a hypothetical example, If a large number of parents spend time taking exercise with their children on a regular basis, youngsters would be more likely to become healthier.
In conclusion, the aforementioned problems have resulted from diverse causes suggested above and can be tackled with various steps. If every sector of our society makes a concerted effort, we can combat the problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 711, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
.... To provide a hypothetical example, If a large number of parents spend time taking exercise with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45833333333 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93378721558 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622023809524 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4635315991 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.266666667 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186602945377 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592848364629 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311199002726 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107689736582 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00828686867304 0.056905535591 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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