Q19. The family has a great influence on childen's development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children's life. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the impact of families on children's behaviour has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that the development of children's personalities are hugely affected by parents, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that parents play a vital role in the development of youngsters' behaviour. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that all children are inclined to rely on their parents at the beginning of the socialisation process before receiving primary education. As a brief illustration, children with parents suffering from obesity stemming from unhealthy eating habits, such as over-consumption of junk food, are more likely to become overweight given that they have a predisposition to eat the same food consumed by their parents. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that the parents' role in the development of children's behaviour.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that only parents exert a huge effect on the way children act. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that a myriad of working parents is incapable of spending enough time with their offspring because of devotion to work in the fiercely competitive society. Thus, youngsters learn a multitude of behaviour patterns and habits from their peers and teachers in general given that they often expend a great deal of time with their friends and teachers. Furthermore, the development of technology makes it possible for youngsters to make use of their time online, meaning that adolescents who generally are incapable of distinguishing right from wrong can be exposed to huge amounts of harmful and obscene information, having a detrimental effect on young people's personalities. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 656, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...be a solid basis for the claim that the parents role in the development of childrens be...
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Line 10, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in general, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29444444444 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99095343814 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.6490210835 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.066666667 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0956368559589 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310076194987 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284456068365 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0523699499838 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334914505023 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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