Question in 11/10/2014, Vietnam:
Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that the increasing usage of mobile phones and computers has led to the depletion of opportunities to communicate face to face. I partly agree with this idea.
On the one hand, humans' communication has been narrowed down due to the using of mobile phones and computers. Firstly, many people are too dependent on high-tech devices that they neglect having actual contact with other people. For example, more and more youngsters are not only always glued to the tiny mobile screens but also attached to messaging each other through social networking sites that they have gotten less involved in actual face-to-face conversations at school. Secondly, the considerable attachment to computers makes a contribution that is some children have been segregated from their parents. Children who are engrossed in computer games usually participate less in family outings, which creates a downfall in communication.
On the other hand, technologically cutting-edge devices are advantageous in some way. One reason is that on account of those social networking apps, individuals are allowed to strengthen their relationships no matter where they are in the world. For instance, the incredible development of communicating apps in general and Skype in particular has provided people to have international calls which are able to last for hours by using any technological device having Wi-Fi connection. Another reason is that people could both save a great deal of money and still keep in touch with each other more efficiently by using any kinds of hi-tech equipment. In my experience, the traditional way of communicating via letters had cost individuals a large amount of money and they usually used to have to wait for a long time to actually receive others' answers. In contrast, a person now has the ability to keep themselves up-to-date with any information from his family members without any expensive fees, using the automatically installed apps on mobile phones.
In conclusion, it is certainly true that computers and cellphones have caused the decline in communication but this is by no means the factor driving the way people communicate to extinction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, still, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in general, in particular, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32173913043 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06688583091 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568115942029 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5047912822 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.142857143 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0714285714 7.06120827912 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206156707474 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682288912292 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631469085664 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137852792384 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436271928202 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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