In recent years, the family structure has changed as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think this changes are positive or nagative?

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In recent years, the family structure has changed as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think this changes are positive or nagative?

It is undoubted that there are many differences between the modern life and the life in decades before. One of them is the change of family structure as well as family roles. In my opinion, these changes are positive progress.
Firstly, the traditional family are the extended families, all the members consist of grandparents, father,mother, children and grandchildren all living under the same roof. In the contrary, the modern form of families are the nuclear families where people live with parents and children. This positive trend means that the conflict between the older and the younger can be avoided. Moreover, single parents can look after their children by themselves and make them stronger as well as independent.
Secondly, it is clearly change in the role of family members. A few decades ago, the men kept main producers while the women were the care givers. The responsibilities for all expenditure in family were on the shoulder of fathers. It seemed that the finance was unstable. Nowadays , men and women take similar role in family. Both parents not only can be the breadwinners but also share household duties. The women go out to work. They are able to earn plenty of money to improve financial condition of family. They also have opportunities to pursue their education and profession. For instance, there are many women play vital roles of large companies and contribute their qualify for developed society. Meanwhile, modern husbands tend to stay_at_home parent to look after children and housework. This lead to equal treatment and respect to women.
In conclusion, the change of family structure as well as family roles are positive trends. They are suitable with the modern life, the liberty of any individuals is protected, people can do what they like and what they are good at. Both men and women take part in social_work related and be treated equally.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07717041801 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73897099542 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549839228296 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5198534978 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.7727272727 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1363636364 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266174625379 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827770243457 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138292201222 0.0667982634062 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196900194459 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10865047886 0.056905535591 191% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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