In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
Correlation between equal opportunities and individual success has attracted the attention of political and social scientists of late. Some of them argue that socialist political system is conducive for successful ventures. However, others point out that individual freedom of action is the key to excellence in life. Although equality is part of the buzz, I believe it does not promote success, because it does not encourage competition and discourages hard work.
People embrace success when competition is encouraged. In socialist societies, where "equality" is the watchword, everybody is given the same opportunities to perform. Everyone is working at the same pace, because even if they produce more, they are not going to benefit from it. For example, in the defunct U.S.S.R, despite the initial economic boom, people had a bitter taste of poverty and scarcity of essential commodities. This is one of the two reasons why I believe equality is not a precursor to personal achievement.
Moreover, in socialist cultures nobody is encouraged to put in their best efforts. There a worker gets their wages in proportion to the number of members in their family, and not in relation to the amount of work they do. Thus, people get their allowance regardless of what they do. For instance, a doctor with two children would draw the same salary as a police constable with the same number of children. In this way success is quite elusive in socialist countries.
In conclusion, socialist societies do not believe in encouraging competition and hard work, which are the two important ingredients that contribute to success. Therefore, I believe equality does not create suitable environment for individual achievement. It is the duty of governments to encourage people to succeed even at the expense of equality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28965517241 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08892386665 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562068965517 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5594676761 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2352941176 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0588235294 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15397005683 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500964383453 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569993125604 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983355265763 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512299667793 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.