In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are pos

Since the beginning of the 21st century, an interest in connection with equality and individual achievement is skyrocketing. Some people state individuals could obtain numerous successes in egalitarian societies, whereas their counterparts believe more accomplishments can be seen once they are free to proceed based on their credits. However, in my view, high levels of personal achievements can be possible if the latter phenomenon is promoted.

To begin with, it is often said that freedom of individuals might strengthen inborn talent in various fields, regardless of egalitarian regulations, which could lead to various achievements. In the USA, for instance, many American nationals run their own start-ups businesses in various fields with constant competitive encouragement might generate massive productivity of their own companies, as well as economic output, is flourished. Sensex on Economy reveals the USA is the top one always among countries because individual start-ups are encouraged according to their wish.

Moreover, freedom also boots technological advancements where it is preferred. In specific communities, personal priorities are encouraged without substantial restrictions in order to achieve high levels of success. For example, Germany, where its citizens invent unprecedented machines, to access the reputation, which might be the reason that German technology is strengthening everywhere. Therefore, people are free to succeed in order to possess high levels of accomplishment, irrespective of implementing the same rules.

Having considered the above possible reasons concluded that high levels of personal achievements could be seen more such as productivity, financial growth, and technological progression, once individual talented aspirants are encouraged, without regarding egalitarian regulations.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed according to their wish. Moreover, freedom also boots technological advance...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing egalitarian regulations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, such as, as well as, in my view, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.21317829457 5.12529762239 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37534370628 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635658914729 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8120351221 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.727272727 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4545454545 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5454545455 7.06120827912 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258520563898 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944256008033 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814641619418 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163833018531 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11076057457 0.056905535591 195% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.75 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 19.03 12.4159519038 153% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.71 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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