Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes is banned. Do you agree or disagree?
It is claimed that food products marketing should be prohibited like the advertisements of cigarettes because overeating exerts as pernicious influence upon people as smoking. To some extent, I hold the same opinion with the idea that eating too much has adverse impacts on people but I would also argue that we do still need commercials of products related to foods.
On the one hand, consuming a large amount of food is a detriment to people’s health conditions. For example, taking
excessive food intake into your body potentially leads to obesity. Furthermore, people who binge fast food or processed food take higher risks of suffering from numerous health-related problems such as high blood pressure, diabetes, and in a more urgent case, death. These numbers of people can be comparable with those undergoing lung cancer due to smoking.
On the other hand, it may not be a good idea to forbit the adverts of foodstuffs for a variety of reasons. Marketing is a key part in modern business. To illustrate, the company approach perspective customers and inform them about their new products through broadcasting propaganda, pamphlet. Without advertisements, food manufacturers would experience crisis because their decline in the number of sales owning to prohibition policy. Furthermore, although adverts still play a role in the sales of products, buyers also purchase products not just only through publicity but also their qualities.
In conclusion, although consuming too much food have some drawbacks, I personally believe that governments should not put a ban on foodstuff commercials for some factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, may, so, still, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39215686275 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04540546155 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.643137254902 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0648697189 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.583333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177195843015 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578064393628 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703344306661 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904725727023 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718832621819 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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